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Mr Jones asked the whole class to go to different peoples articles and write our opinion of it on a seperate peice of paper.


Here is what was written for mine:


-I like the title and how you've described her background clearly and how you've gone into detail about her life and the sentences we're put together well.


-I like the interviewer's reactions in the questions.


-I thought it was great how you introduced artists from the real music industry e.g. Harry Styles.

My second draft of my double page spread

LALA GONE GAGA

Laureena Davisia is a 17 year old girl who worked in nothing but a simple corner shop in her small hometown of Abergavenny after dropping out of school to earn a  little cash to help persue her dreams of becoming a big star in the music industry. She tells us all about her X Factor experience, her on-off relationship with Harry  Styles from One Direction and tells us about her obsession for Lady Gaga.

So, Mistress LaLa, we're all DYING to know about your relationship with heart-throb hottie Harry Styles, spill all!

-There's honestly not much to say, admittedly its hard keeping a relationship going when your're both in the music industry as you both go on seperate tours, have  seperate gigs to play at, and in different parts of the world. We're still strong, even though we've had our ups and downs. I honestly love him to bits. (giggles)

Aww, how sweet! How do you feel about his overflowing flock of female fans?

-I think its wonderful he has so many! Come on, what boy doesnt act more confident infront of women? Especially as you need a lot of confidence to be able to get up on  stage and sing and when girls scream his name, it gives him the right amount he needs.

Very supportive of you! Is he just the same with you?

-Definaitely! He understands just how hard it is to be a singer and how you need the support of your fans, he understands the space we need due to attending concerts  and going on tours but when we see each other, we value our time together.

Too cute! Your music career must be tough having hard faced Simon Cowell as a manager!

-(Gasps)Oh no! Not at all! He's the most softest man on the planet. Although he looks very hard faced, he's honestly not. He's been so supportive and had so much faith in my when I was on the X Factor and I proberably wouldn't have made it to 3rd place if I didn't have him as my mentor. He did scare me a little at first, but now we're close.

Wow! Softest? We're shocked! Has he introduced you to any A-list celebrities yet?

-Umm, quite a few actually! A fortnight ago, I attended Rihanna's birthday party. It was wild, Bubbles covered the floor, balloons fell from the ceiling, music blasted from each direction and Ed Sheeran sang a few songs for her. I met Ed, The Wanted, Chris Brown, Ne-Yo, Beyonce, Adele and obviously Rihanna.

How did you react when you met them?

-When I met the A-list stars, I had to keep very calm because all I wanted to do was scream, ask for their autograph and have a picture with them so I could post it on my facebook and rub my friends noses in  the fact that i've met the most amazing singers in the world! I'm like any other teenage girl really, I honestly don't feel like a star at all.

Well, you've certainly rubbed it in our noses! Anyway, lets move on. You are now 17, but what happened when you finished school?

-Oh, no! I didn't do too well in school due to my song wrtiting. I was always distracted from my lessons if I had a pen and piece of paper in my hand, I'd write song  after song, so I quit school as soon as I was able to and started working in my local corner shop, to save up a little bit of cash but it also gave me time to write  more songs.

You are very dedicated to writing music. You said you saved your money, what were you saving up for?

-Music has always been one of my top priorities and something I've deeply fallen in love with and wanted to base my life around. I always wanted to prove to people I'm  worthy enough to become a famous singer. I wanted to let everyone hear my songs which I've spent most of my school life writing. I also have a mad dress sense and the  outfits I wanted to create, it didn't come cheap.

You have certainly proved yourself! Your the second person in the music industry to have a very wild and crazy look, was Lady Gaga perhaps an inspiration you got your  style from?

-As obvious as it is, Lady Gaga is my inspiration. She is so passionate about her music and every song she has written has been amazing as I think everyone would agree  and I love her style, it's so weird and strange and no one understands it. Which is like me, I make my songs about my experiences and who I am so people can understand  me but then make my dress sense so weird that it gives me that little bit of mystery that only I understand about myself. I just simply hide my body behind my outfits  and spill my life story out in songs.

Although strange, Lady Gaga is a very inspirational woman. Any particular songs you like of hers?

-I love every single one of them, but my favourite has got to be You and I, as it's about how passionate she feels about someone else, like how I feel about Harry.

You seem to really understand music and the meanings behind the lyrics don't you?

-I do yes, its not just a beat and words thrown together and hope for the best, there is always a meaning behind each and every song, whether it is a simple meaning or  whether its someone's whole life, written down into verses.

You have a new album out FINALLY!

-(Laughs) Yes, my new album is called 'Like Everyone Else' because that's who I am. Just because my name is up in lights doesn't mean that I have to be treated any  differently. It has most of my songs on it from high school up until now.

Your picture doesn't look very mad and crazy though?

-I know, its a natural photo of who I am underneath all of my make up and cray clothing. Like everyone else.

I can't wait to listen to the album. Any last words before you go?

-I hope I don't dissappoint. Umm, yes, for readers who have read my story, no matter what your dream is, you can fulfil it, I did.

Mistress LaLa's album Like Everyone Else is released the 14th of January 2012

First Draft of My Double Page Spread

 LALA GONE GAGA

Laureena Davisia is a 17 year old girl who worked in nothing but a simple corner shop in her small hometown of Abergavenny after dropping out of school to earn a  little cash to help persue her dreams of becoming a big star in the music industry. She tells us all about her X Factor experience, her on-off relationship with Harry  Styles from One Direction and tells us about her obsession for Lady Gaga.

So, Mistress LaLa, we're all DYING to know about your relationship with heart-throb hottie Harry Styles, spill all!

-There's honestly not much to say, admittedly its hard keeping a relationship going when your're both in the music industry as you both go on seperate tours, have  seperate gigs to play at, and in different parts of the world. We're still strong, even though we've had our ups and downs. I honestly love him to bits. (giggles)

Aww, how sweet! How do you feel about his overflowing flock of female fans?

-I think its wonderful he has so many! Come on, what boy doesnt act more confident infront of women? Especially as you need a lot of confidence to be able to get up on  stage and sing and when girls scream his name, it gives him the right amount he needs.

Very supportive of you! Is he just the same with you?

-Definaitely! He understands just how hard it is to be a singer and how you need the support of your fans, he understands the space we need due to attending concerts  and going on tours but when we see each other, we value our time together.

Let's move on. You are now 17, but what happened when you finished school?

-Oh, no! I didn't do too well in school due to my song wrtiting. I was always distracted from my lessons if I had a pen and piece of paper in my hand, I'd write song  after song, so I quit school as soon as I was able to and started working in my local corner shop, to save up a little bit of cash but it also gave me time to write  more songs.

You are very dedicated to writing music. You said you saved your money, what were you saving up for?

-Music has always been one of my top priorities and something I've deeply fallen in love with and wanted to base my life around. I always wanted to prove to people I'm  worthy enough to become a famous singer. I wanted to let everyone hear my songs which I've spent most of my school life writing. I also have a mad dress sense and the  outfits I wanted to create, it didn't come cheap.

You have certainly proved yourself! Your the second person in the music industry to have a very wild and crazy look, was Lady Gaga perhaps an inspiration you got your  style from?

-As obvious as it is, Lady Gaga is my inspiration. She is so passionate about her music and every song she has written has been amazing as I think everyone would agree  and I love her style, it's so weird and strange and no one understands it. Which is like me, I make my songs about my experiences and who I am so people can understand  me but then make my dress sense so weird that it gives me that little bit of mystery that only I understand about myself. I just simply hide my body behind my outfits  and spill my life story out in songs.

Although strange, Lady Gaga is a very inspirational woman. Any particular songs you like of hers?

-I love every single one of them, but my favourite has got to be You and I, as it's about how passionate she feels about someone else, like how I feel about Harry.

You seem to really understand music and the meanings behind the lyrics don't you?

-I do yes, its not just a beat and words thrown together and hope for the best, there is always a meaning behind each and every song, whether it is a simple meaning or  whether its someone's whole life, written down into verses.

You have a new album out FINALLY!

-(Laughs) Yes, my new album is called 'Like Everyone Else' because that's who I am. Just because my name is up in lights doesn't mean that I have to be treated any  differently. It has most of my songs on it from high school up until now.

Your picture doesn't look very mad and crazy though?

-I know, its a natural photo of who I am underneath all of my make up and cray clothing. Like everyone else.

I can't wait to listen to the album. Any last words before you go?

-I hope I don't dissappoint. Umm, yes, for readers who have read my story, no matter what your dream is, you can fulfil it, I did.

Mistress LaLa's album Like Everyone Else is released the 14th of January 2012

Contents Pictures





With the three pictures above, I will remove the backgrounds and choose the best one to use for my contents page to advertise my free CD. I prefer the top one to the others.

With the three pictures above, I will also remove the back ground and see which one I prefer to advertise the headphones for sale with a christmas card from B.

With the two above, I havent fully decided which of each I'm going to advertise to sell. Either the JB purfume on its own or the whole box set, but I'm going to remove the back ground and also see which looks best.